When I got into this I wasn't expecting messages about self-love and found family. There were many tears. I wish I could forget everything and read it again. Thank you to everyone who worked on this.
This was great. I absolutely Love a story that makes me change my perspective on characters so strongly and it wasn't just the obvious character i have in mind when i say that.
When I first heard about this project I didnt know what to expect other than fighting being a big part of it. After meaning to read it for so long and now having done so, wow. PLEASE READ IT IF YOU HAVENT. I will share a few thoughts as a personal send off and compliments to the chef :> Where do I begin?
Early on they are very flawed and a lot of them come across like dicks, but that's why their development shines so much better. The hook for the whole story is set up so early that the resolution of it at the end of the story is a bitter sweet win. It was a perfect way to start off the narrative. And while the cast is small with only a handful of important characters, they all get so much love and attention and work incredibly well of each other, that I feel like any more would have been distracting.
The writing of the day to day life, the training, fighting and many of the heart to hearts were written so well that I got immersed in the world. Fight days were the highlights, with the action being clear with mostly words and few visuals. While the mundane days leading up to it had drama and surprises around every corner. I never knew what to expect, sometimes it was silly with lighthearted moments thanks to Redline, Bucky and Drayden. Other times members of FANG as well as each interaction with Bruce left an uneasy air as well as a little bit of mystery? It was great.
This may not be true for everyone, but it felt nice being able to relate to a lot of the personal issues the cast was facing. (Not to spoil anything, but having a character be asexual made me jump out of my chair. Thank you for the representation I often feel missing in VNs ;v;)
When it comes to the late half of the story had me at the edge of my seat. The intensity of the conflicts increased with each passing month in the story, I was scared of what it all builds up to. I grew so attached to the characters that I was rooting for them like they close friends I desperately needed to succeed in order to know peace. Although the story's end is satisfying, I adore its world and main cast so much, that it makes me wish there was more. These 3 grown goobers and their spiritual fathers stole my heart haha!
All this to say I loved it. It's been on my mind ever since, it resonated strongly with me and I cannot emphasize how well it's doing what it set out to do. Excited for future projects!!!
(I dont write reviews like ever so I hope my ramblings make sense haha)
My heart rate picked up a lot over course of this, really put my ass on the emotional roller coaster, had me rootin and hollering(internally)
I will be thinking of their vacation at the beach house. As the break they truly deserve! I could feel myself going light headed when that relationship was truly defined, great stuff great stuff I’ve always wanted to see that in media 💛💛💛
Hello！I'm coming to ask if I can translate your work into Chinese.It will not be used for commercial purposes.Just to share your fantastic work with more furry-loving people.I'm looking forward to getting a reply from you whether you permit it or not.PLEASE！ ヽ(｡･ω･｡)ﾉ
Hello! My apologies for taking so long. Fan translations are absolutely welcome, please feel free to do so! Thank you for asking, and for being interested in taking the time to translate a project like this!
In first impression I thought this was an ordinary vn when I found it but after reading though it i am shocked how good it is if I were to rate it,it will be a 10/10 one the best ones I ever read and with a heartwarming ending and I am excited for their next project if there is one. =)
I just finished reading and I gotta say I'm sad to see that its over. The ending was so sweet. This VN was pretty deep and emotional at times and I really liked the characters a lot. The 2 choices at the end of the phone call with dad especially, held SOO much weight to it. I just sat there staring at the screen for 5 min unsure what to click. Imma miss my Brucey, Drayden and everyone needs someone like Redline or Buckey in their life. Sad to see them go.
It’s been such a nice ride ^^
I’m so happy to see the end of this beautiful story and also sad that we won’t see our boys again in another round.
Haters that used to plague this project be damned! They will not see how fulfilling experience it become. It’s us who will remember and spread the word and love to the world!
Thank you Leo <3
It was a short, but awesome novel for me. While reading, I felt both sorrow and happiness, both anger and enthusiasm. I felt what the characters felt at that moment and I was always eager to find out what would come next. I'm truly grateful for ur team and ur job. U did everything perfectly. I absolutely loved the ending and happy that everything ended like that. ^w^
I don't know how to express how I feel about this Vn, but just wow, and to think that I followed the development from its first version and looked forward to the next update month after month, now that it's concluded I can say that it was worth the wait, and the ending, like almost every Fvn that ends, leaves me with a feeling of emptiness, you become attached to the characters and you would like to live more adventures with them but it left me with great satisfaction. Congratulations and thank you for this great work, I enjoyed it.
Wow... That was just.... Wow. Gut-wrenching and bittersweet at the same time. This VN was a wild ride, and I'm glad I stayed till the end. Like, damn, I'm not even into wrestling and all that stuff, but this thing just changed something in my head forever. Great work!
What a beautiful send-off in the end. Undefeated has so much heart in it, it’s really lovely. I’ve gotten teary-eyed multiple times over the course of this story. Redline is just the sweetest fighter ever. But really, all the character writing was really well done. Thanks for sharing this VN with us! >w<
I already gave this vn 5 stars a while ago so ill just leave a comment. Loved this vn, was hooked since the first round and the ending (whilst extremely violent xD) didn't disappoint 10/10 mwah
I love a happy ending. The stuck together through thick and thin and made it out alright. Though it has come to an end this vn will hold a special place in my heart. It may too much to ask but pls make a sequel of how they're spending their vacation at the beach house 🙏
The way you wrote the announcement on Discord scared the shit out of me, uncalled for lmfao
Here is my review!
I remember finding out about this game from the first update, and how instantly I became so hooked to the story! I remember thinking how interesting it was to find a VN about MMA, wondering how it would turn out. Color me surprised at how unexpectedly I saw this game become something SO GOOD. The writing is PEAK, the way it builds up suspense is the best because omg I could not help but be on the edge of my seat as the story kept rising to its climax. I enjoyed every second of this game, the worldbuilding is great, and the characters have SO much personality (I can't get over how well they were written). The overall story is something I never expected but was so very pleasantly surprised as I watched it unfold. Not to mention, the ending is so satisfying >:D
Thank you SO MUCH for creating and sharing this game for others to play! As well as Congrats on finishing it! It feels rare to see VNs get finished lmao.
The only thing I wanna critique is that I wish there was a bit more writing when it comes to the Commissioners’ motives. I felt it could’ve been a little more explained as to why he did what he did, because when it’s revealed, he just kind of seemed to be a villain just to be a villain (and a dick to everyone). But from the character’s perspective, I can see why it doesn’t really get explained.
That and it was a bit misleading (during the updates I mean) that it seemed like there were going to be routes, especially with that choice of interests. However, looking back on it I see how it was only a choice for different dialogue in that specific scene. I really don’t mind it being linear anyway, I loved how it turned out in the end for those three ;3
IMO, 8.5/10, such a good story.
Talking about the update itself... (spoilers)
OOH THE SUSPENSE GOT ME SO STRESSED, EVERYTHING KEPT BUILDING AND BUILDING UNTIL BOOM, THE GUY SOMEHOW FUCKING STABS HIMSELF LMAOOO
Also, why the fuck they got whole ass prison cells up in this bitch? THANK GOD FOR BUCKY, he definitely was the best one to beat the shit out of Cole, I wish they both beat him more but time was important lmao. My heart dropped when Red went missing tho, why did he meander his way out of bed the second he woke up lol, poor guy. And STILL, he gets talked down to when he finds his grandpa and Zander, I laughed when he said ‘fuck him up,’ AND OH BOY DID WE, GO ZANDER. SWEET SWEET REVENGE. Also, Theodore literally missed his shot from point-blank range… HOW? LIKE, I DIDN’T THINK HE WOULD SHOOT AT ALL, I GOT SO SCARED WHEN HE DID.
UGH, this game was so good. I WAS PRUMPING MY FISTS SO HARD WHEN THEY BECAME A THREEWAY RELATIONSHIP, THEY’RE ALL SO MEANT FOR EACH OTHER I LOVE IT. The ending couldn’t have been any more satisfying, I loved how it all turned out ;3;
I’m so looking forward to seeing what else is in store from the team ❤
This was the best visual novel I've ever played in my life the art was amazing and so was everything else in the game. Thank you for giving us the best experience ever.
im gonna say this but im really impressed about the ending. i though Zander will die when "the old man" is using knife on him. this game make me feel like watching an action movie and love story i guess. Kinda make me wonder what will happen to Ted(Theodore) even?
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When I got into this I wasn't expecting messages about self-love and found family. There were many tears. I wish I could forget everything and read it again. Thank you to everyone who worked on this.
This was great. I absolutely Love a story that makes me change my perspective on characters so strongly and it wasn't just the obvious character i have in mind when i say that.
Not the best
When I first heard about this project I didnt know what to expect other than fighting being a big part of it. After meaning to read it for so long and now having done so, wow. PLEASE READ IT IF YOU HAVENT. I will share a few thoughts as a personal send off and compliments to the chef :> Where do I begin?
Early on they are very flawed and a lot of them come across like dicks, but that's why their development shines so much better. The hook for the whole story is set up so early that the resolution of it at the end of the story is a bitter sweet win. It was a perfect way to start off the narrative. And while the cast is small with only a handful of important characters, they all get so much love and attention and work incredibly well of each other, that I feel like any more would have been distracting.
The writing of the day to day life, the training, fighting and many of the heart to hearts were written so well that I got immersed in the world.
Fight days were the highlights, with the action being clear with mostly words and few visuals. While the mundane days leading up to it had drama and surprises around every corner. I never knew what to expect, sometimes it was silly with lighthearted moments thanks to Redline, Bucky and Drayden. Other times members of FANG as well as each interaction with Bruce left an uneasy air as well as a little bit of mystery? It was great.
This may not be true for everyone, but it felt nice being able to relate to a lot of the personal issues the cast was facing. (Not to spoil anything, but having a character be asexual made me jump out of my chair. Thank you for the representation I often feel missing in VNs ;v;)
When it comes to the late half of the story had me at the edge of my seat. The intensity of the conflicts increased with each passing month in the story, I was scared of what it all builds up to. I grew so attached to the characters that I was rooting for them like they close friends I desperately needed to succeed in order to know peace.
Although the story's end is satisfying, I adore its world and main cast so much, that it makes me wish there was more. These 3 grown goobers and their spiritual fathers stole my heart haha!
All this to say I loved it. It's been on my mind ever since, it resonated strongly with me and I cannot emphasize how well it's doing what it set out to do. Excited for future projects!!!
(I dont write reviews like ever so I hope my ramblings make sense haha)
RAAAAAAAAAA IT’S GOOD !!!!
Shaking in my boots I just finished it
I am unbelievably happy to have read this story
My heart rate picked up a lot over course of this, really put my ass on the emotional roller coaster, had me rootin and hollering(internally)
I will be thinking of their vacation at the beach house. As the break they truly deserve! I could feel myself going light headed when that relationship was truly defined, great stuff great stuff I’ve always wanted to see that in media 💛💛💛
Hello！I'm coming to ask if I can translate your work into Chinese.It will not be used for commercial purposes.Just to share your fantastic work with more furry-loving people.I'm looking forward to getting a reply from you whether you permit it or not.PLEASE！ ヽ(｡･ω･｡)ﾉ
Hello! My apologies for taking so long. Fan translations are absolutely welcome, please feel free to do so! Thank you for asking, and for being interested in taking the time to translate a project like this!
Thank you for your agreement！Your work is really excellent!
I though that i am playing undertale because of the final battle ost
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I'm gonna need about 5 sequels to this vn filled with just the day to day lives of Zancer, Red and Bruce and them being the power throuple of all time
I love this Visual Novel.
Great Humor
Great Characters
Great Plot
I would really like a sequel too this.
Great visual novel with loveable character and insteresting story
I Laugh so hard when reading Bruce trying to seduce cole lol
I LOVE THIS VN SO MUCH IT DESERVES A MILLION STARS IT WAS BEAUTIFUL I CANT EVEN COMPREHEND IT ANYMORE AAAAAAAAAAAAAH
wrote a longish review on my website, in case anyone is interested: https://purkka.fi/fvn_recs.html#undefeated
Didnt know i've been needed Redline bf in my life, but here i am
In first impression I thought this was an ordinary vn when I found it but after reading though it i am shocked how good it is if I were to rate it,it will be a 10/10 one the best ones I ever read and with a heartwarming ending and I am excited for their next project if there is one. =)
That was an amazing read, wow! Didn't really know what to expect when I found this but I'm so glad I decided to give it a go. So so so good!
Thanks to the author and to everyone else that made this VN possible, it was truly a delight to read.
What weird lazy detailing on the end...
I kinda aggree on this, the ending could have been better..
i love this so so so so so so so so so much
im gonna miss this so bad 💖💖
Congratulations on completion. What a ride that was.
Are there routes? Like for Drayden, Bucky and Redline. I ask because of the options for hanging out and all that.
nope. it's a linear story.
I just finished reading and I gotta say I'm sad to see that its over. The ending was so sweet. This VN was pretty deep and emotional at times and I really liked the characters a lot. The 2 choices at the end of the phone call with dad especially, held SOO much weight to it. I just sat there staring at the screen for 5 min unsure what to click. Imma miss my Brucey, Drayden and everyone needs someone like Redline or Buckey in their life. Sad to see them go.
This VN is as solid as Bruces Jaw! 5 stars!
It’s been such a nice ride ^^ I’m so happy to see the end of this beautiful story and also sad that we won’t see our boys again in another round. Haters that used to plague this project be damned! They will not see how fulfilling experience it become. It’s us who will remember and spread the word and love to the world! Thank you Leo <3
It was a short, but awesome novel for me. While reading, I felt both sorrow and happiness, both anger and enthusiasm. I felt what the characters felt at that moment and I was always eager to find out what would come next. I'm truly grateful for ur team and ur job. U did everything perfectly. I absolutely loved the ending and happy that everything ended like that. ^w^
PS. The commissioner is an a**h**e.
damn what happened?
Well, it's up to you to find out. :3
I don't know how to express how I feel about this Vn, but just wow, and to think that I followed the development from its first version and looked forward to the next update month after month, now that it's concluded I can say that it was worth the wait, and the ending, like almost every Fvn that ends, leaves me with a feeling of emptiness, you become attached to the characters and you would like to live more adventures with them but it left me with great satisfaction. Congratulations and thank you for this great work, I enjoyed it.
Unngggg....The ending was so sweet I was tearing up the whole time ;-;
I'm so happy I got to experience this VN, and thanks so much for making it. I enjoyed every second of this!
Wow... That was just.... Wow. Gut-wrenching and bittersweet at the same time. This VN was a wild ride, and I'm glad I stayed till the end. Like, damn, I'm not even into wrestling and all that stuff, but this thing just changed something in my head forever. Great work!
That was the very best ending one could make with that story. Hat off to you, for you made the kind of character I couldn't help but root for.
What a beautiful send-off in the end. Undefeated has so much heart in it, it’s really lovely. I’ve gotten teary-eyed multiple times over the course of this story. Redline is just the sweetest fighter ever. But really, all the character writing was really well done. Thanks for sharing this VN with us! >w<
I already gave this vn 5 stars a while ago so ill just leave a comment. Loved this vn, was hooked since the first round and the ending (whilst extremely violent xD) didn't disappoint 10/10 mwah
Fantastic game
Leo can we ever get a sequel to this one, please
I loved it🙌
I love a happy ending. The stuck together through thick and thin and made it out alright. Though it has come to an end this vn will hold a special place in my heart. It may too much to ask but pls make a sequel of how they're spending their vacation at the beach house 🙏
love this novel I wonder what if all characters show up in new project like supporting characters help main?
Just finished. LOVED. I'll miss this bunch
The way you wrote the announcement on Discord scared the shit out of me, uncalled for lmfao
Here is my review!
I remember finding out about this game from the first update, and how instantly I became so hooked to the story! I remember thinking how interesting it was to find a VN about MMA, wondering how it would turn out. Color me surprised at how unexpectedly I saw this game become something SO GOOD. The writing is PEAK, the way it builds up suspense is the best because omg I could not help but be on the edge of my seat as the story kept rising to its climax. I enjoyed every second of this game, the worldbuilding is great, and the characters have SO much personality (I can't get over how well they were written). The overall story is something I never expected but was so very pleasantly surprised as I watched it unfold. Not to mention, the ending is so satisfying >:D Thank you SO MUCH for creating and sharing this game for others to play! As well as Congrats on finishing it! It feels rare to see VNs get finished lmao.The only thing I wanna critique is that I wish there was a bit more writing when it comes to the Commissioners’ motives. I felt it could’ve been a little more explained as to why he did what he did, because when it’s revealed, he just kind of seemed to be a villain just to be a villain (and a dick to everyone). But from the character’s perspective, I can see why it doesn’t really get explained. That and it was a bit misleading (during the updates I mean) that it seemed like there were going to be routes, especially with that choice of interests. However, looking back on it I see how it was only a choice for different dialogue in that specific scene. I really don’t mind it being linear anyway, I loved how it turned out in the end for those three ;3
IMO, 8.5/10, such a good story.
Talking about the update itself... (spoilers)
OOH THE SUSPENSE GOT ME SO STRESSED, EVERYTHING KEPT BUILDING AND BUILDING UNTIL BOOM, THE GUY SOMEHOW FUCKING STABS HIMSELF LMAOOOAlso, why the fuck they got whole ass prison cells up in this bitch? THANK GOD FOR BUCKY, he definitely was the best one to beat the shit out of Cole, I wish they both beat him more but time was important lmao. My heart dropped when Red went missing tho, why did he meander his way out of bed the second he woke up lol, poor guy. And STILL, he gets talked down to when he finds his grandpa and Zander, I laughed when he said ‘fuck him up,’ AND OH BOY DID WE, GO ZANDER. SWEET SWEET REVENGE. Also, Theodore literally missed his shot from point-blank range… HOW? LIKE, I DIDN’T THINK HE WOULD SHOOT AT ALL, I GOT SO SCARED WHEN HE DID.
UGH, this game was so good. I WAS PRUMPING MY FISTS SO HARD WHEN THEY BECAME A THREEWAY RELATIONSHIP, THEY’RE ALL SO MEANT FOR EACH OTHER I LOVE IT. The ending couldn’t have been any more satisfying, I loved how it all turned out ;3;
I’m so looking forward to seeing what else is in store from the team ❤
This was the best visual novel I've ever played in my life the art was amazing and so was everything else in the game. Thank you for giving us the best experience ever.
Thank you, everyone. 🐶💚
NO, THANK YOU!!
im gonna say this but im really impressed about the ending. i though Zander will die when "the old man" is using knife on him. this game make me feel like watching an action movie and love story i guess. Kinda make me wonder what will happen to Ted(Theodore) even?